The following is in response to Allen Woodman’s “Wallet.”
The tension in Woodman’s flash prose piece explodes when “the unexpected happens”: the father is robbed of his phony wallet, the one he packed with “losing Florida Lottery tickets and a fortune cookie fortune” to entice a thief. I love the humor that this narrative exudes when the father, after his wallet has been chased and retrieved from the thief, is seen fleeing the scene.
I like how the father is written as a criminal in the story even though he is the one that gets robbed. The father is seen “casing” a department store instead of just shopping there and at the end he flees suggesting that he is the culprit.
I really love the creative language that he uses. I especially like when he is describing his father bending over—“allowing the false billfold to rise like a dark wish and be grappled by the passing shadow of a hand.” This sentence builds up the tension that explodes when “the unexpected happens.”
I found an awesome video that is reminiscent of “Wallet”—http://vimeo.com/17616207